2014 Get Started Write Challenge: Day 9

For today’s task, assemble your complete query letter. To do this, take your pitch from day 5 and bio from day 6–and combine them with a personalized slant to the market you selected on day 7.

Here’s my attempt at a query:

Dear Dalia Faupel,

It’s common knowledge that mothers-to-be have to carry the heavier burden and risk in a first-time pregnancy, but fathers-to-be aren’t completely off the hook–and they shouldn’t be. In my article, “How First-Time Dads Can Get More Involved,” I’ll reveal issues first-time dads might encounter and how to overcome them to be a more engaged father.

In this article, I plan to interview doctors, mothers, and fathers from around the country to get their perspective on these issues. Plus, I will reference studies and reports issued that specifically comment on how fathers deal with pregnancy and early childhood.

This article will not only be of interest to men, but also the women who love them–and could use their positive support.

I’m the author of Solving the World’s Problems and Senior Content Editor with the Writer’s Digest Writing Community. I live in Duluth with my wife Tammy, who helps me keep track of our five little poets (four boys and one princess). Follow me on Twitter @robertleebrewer.

Best,

Robert Lee Brewer

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After studying my market closer, I realized that I needed to make changes to my pitch for it to have a better chance of success. For one, I originally intended to focus more on the potential problems and issues facing fathers-to-be during the pregnancy.

However, Atlanta Parent is focused on parents with children from birth to 18. In other words, I could still focus on dads, but I needed to adjust to after birth.

Atlanta Parent also wants more activity-based articles, so I adjusted my pitch to include ways fathers can overcome potential trouble areas to get more involved in the process. These are small changes, but these small adjustments are what improves a query’s (and writer’s) chances of success.

One more thing: I addressed this query to the magazine’s editor, which I confirmed simply by checking out their website. If the site doesn’t have that information, check the masthead in a copy of the magazine (usually near the front of the magazine).

We’re not submitting the query just yet. While that is an upcoming task, we’re going to let these queries simmer a little–to give you time to make any other adjustments, additions, deletions, etc.

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robert_lee_brewer_1Robert Lee Brewer is Senior Content Editor of the Writer’s Digest Writing Community and author of Solving the World’s Problems (Press 53). A former Poet Laureate of the Blogosphere, he speaks on publishing, poetry, and marketing topics around the country. With five kids, Brewer is always trying to learn more about how to be a better parent for his children. Follow him on Twitter @robertleebrewer.

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